分析写作的表达问题,有助于写作的提高以及写作能力的锻炼,现将学生的文章句子分析如下:

1.Generally speaking, one judging a person by external appearance is immoral action, which could reflect that you are the one only carrying about people’s superficiality.

分析:首先主语部分one judging有问题,主语要用动名词或名词充当,而one judging不合适,其次superficiality的英文解释是lack of depth of knowledge or thought or feeling意思是肤浅，浅薄,此处不通.

改：Generally speaking, judging a person by external appearance is an immoral action, which could reflect that you are the one only caring about exterior looks.

2.Because in my home country, it seems that everything we get should be repercussion, external appearance maybe is too direction.

分析:because用法有问题,要接一个句子,干脆去除. repercussion意思为 the effects of an action or event, especially bad effects that continue for some time〔尤指不好的〕反响；后果,此处不通.

改：It seems that everything we get is often not physically revealed, external appearance is perhaps direct and distinct.

3.However, in my opinion, judging someone by external appearance could benefit person in different way ,including have a probably fulfill cognition of new one and make a better communication.

分析:way要用复数,including后面要接名词或动名词,

改：Nevertheless/however, in my opinion, judging someone by external appearance could benefit a person in different ways, including having a rough and quick understanding of individualexternal qualities and smoothing interpersonal communications.

4.To begin with, judging a person by external appearance, you could know that what is the person look like and who the person maybe is at the fist time.

分析:judging放在主语之前,表示伴随,用的不错,但是know that what is the person look like有句子结构问题.

改：To begin with, judging a person by external appearance, you could know what the person looks like and who the person maybe is for the first time.

5.Nowadays, you have to meet so many civilians in your dairy for making as more as collection with others or finding changes.

分析: civilians用词不够准, 英文解释是anyone who is not a member of the military forces or the police〔与军人、警察相对的〕平民，老百姓,改为people合适,dairy拼写有误,应是daily,改为on a daily basis,同时making as more as collection with others or finding changes,表达有误应该为make connections with sb 意为结交某人,以及finding chances.

改：Nowadays, you have to meet so many people on a daily basis for making more connections with others or finding chances.